- On a scale of 1 to 10, I'd say the story is a 5. The issue we chose was compelling, but some of the footage is not as convincing, in terms of production design. It gets the message across, but I'm concerned whether or not the audience will pick up on it; whether or not the dialogue shots are compelling enough to make the viewers think about the political implications of the issue: abortion and women's rights.
- The story left me thinking that we should have shot better footage. In my edit, the audience may be distracted from the overall objective because of my failure to clip out a residual segment of one clip I deleted and the cutting off, in one clip, of the first 3 quarters of a second of audio. Not having a score doesn't help me. It's shameful really; the emotional power of the film is diminished by unnecessary errors, lack of shot variety, and poor media management, in terms of labeling all the files, among other things.
- I feel that the main character, Elizabeth, does reach a certain state of liberation. In the final scene, she has left her wedding ring on the counter, and she's wearing an outfit that shows her legs, with high-heeled shoes. She's less conservative, less of a pushover; she has chosen not to return to the pro-life demonstrator group, as seen in her leaving those protest signs behind.
- The source of the main idea I started with was a result of my general introspectiveness, which was exacerbated in some respects once I came to college. Although, I may seem to view the world in black-and-white, I've long known that I do not. I can and will appreciate the 'grays in between' when I deem it relevant to my ideological schema. Anyway, the kernel of the story we ended up shooting was a perfect opportunity to work around a current, inflammatory debate--the abortion wars. I can say I somewhat passionate about the issue and women's rights to make their own decisions without the endangerment of their health lurking in the corner. And, even though I'm proud of my Christian values, I'm not an extremist, and I agree in certain instances that one cannot enforce morality.
- After the film's completion, I saw that the theme shifted away from this woman's loneliness as the driving force behind the plot and towards a woman's empowerment. The confrontation with Jeff became the cynosure of the movie. The way he treated her when he found that consultation slip on her desk embodies the chauvinistic attitude that women don't have the right to make decisions about their own bodies.
B) I think the tension was very clear, but the main conflict doesn't seem to be apparent to anyone who's seen the movie so far...
- I say the way that the scenes ended up being structured was different from my expectations, but I saw all the scenes clearly in my mind's eye. I think it's mainly a case of actuality failing to accommodate the 'artistic vision'.
- The part I could easily and pleasurably and easily retell is the scene when Jeff confronts Elizabeth; it's not that I don't remember the other parts, but overall they were less impressing in terms of the emotional effect. Of course, as one who worked on the film, I'm particularly pleased with some of the shots in this scene. I can recall the other scenes as well, but I'm less interested in the way they turned out.
C) I don't think the execution brought out the full potential of the story, but that's more of a production issue rather than something inherently lacking in the script.
- The story doesn't feel complete, because some of the sequences had to be taken out due to poor filming execution and production errors.
- Scene 1 (Elizabeth's routine): 5 The shots are too similar; there's little variety in the shot structure. Only the first sequence has a close-up; all the other shots are medium. Also, there aren't a lot of different angles, so it gets kind of boring. Also, the title is a little distracting, and the crawl, is very distracting.
- Scene 2 (Protest): 5 Mildly interesting. The weakest point is the protest itself; I couldn't find any audio of them protesting, so I had to use presence. Also, it's mostly a one shot deal, so, lack of variety is the culprit again. There's one other shot from a different angle but it's really quick
- Scene 3 (Alone): 4 Boring. There's no audio for the extreme close-up of the hand, but I there should have been some presence to put in there; and once again, it's all shot from one angle, one distance (except the extreme close-up)
- Scene 4 (Martha): 6 Okay. The outstanding problem here is my cut. The transition from a close-up of Martha beckoning Jeff to a medium 2S of the same action is redundant. It's also awkward because there's no usable coverage of Elizabeth's reaction to Martha's first statement. There's also no usable coverage of close-ups for Elizabeth's reaction to Martha's set up. There's no OTS either, so this weakens the scene overall.
- Scene 5 (Jeff): 5 The scene starts out well, but then, when they get into the living room, there's a small reflection of the key light in the bottom left corner of the picture hanging over the chair. It's distracting, but unfortunately that's the best coverage of that point, and the scene would be incomplete without it. The cut to the next section is awkward b/c I took out the part when they sit down on the floor. From there on it's all right.
- Scene 6 (Argument): 5 The "marker" sequence is boring because it's focused on Jeff. He looks away, but there's no cutaway to what he's looking at. Then, from his exit to the confrontation is an awkward jump cut, because the footage for the connecting section couldn't be used; our sound recordist's leg and the boom was in the corner of the shot. After that though, there are some nice-looking shots, but alas, only two OTS, and no usable coverage of Elizabeth's reaction face-on.
- Scene 7 (Reveal): 4 The first part of the shot was blown out, so it looked slightly out-of-place even after color correction. Pretty much the same issue persists; not a lot of shot variety, and the distance between Elizabeth and the group isn't really established.
- Scene 8 (A New Day): 7 One of the best sequences, probably. Although, the shot where the character exits is noticeably tilted, and there's no establishment of her routine, so we don't get a sense of how she's breaking it. On top of that, to make up for no establishing shot, I used an additive cross-dissolve for the transition, to make up for that and to hopefully show the passage of time.
D) What I want to learn to do better is manage my time so I can get tasks done and seem more reliable. I also want to learn how to coordinate all the aspects of pre-production, so that production design and shot list don't quibble with each other on set.
- Obviously, what was not working was the production design and the shot execution--mainly the shot execution. I was in charge of production design, yet I didn't think or have the courage to say "We need to move this" or "We can't have this in the shot," etc. Plus I didn't have every aspect of it under my jurisdiction, so I didn't even get to have a definitive say in what our main character wore.
- Next time, I'd like there to be decisiveness among the group. There was some sort of communication barrier, so each of us didn't always understand what the other was talking about, and sometimes people just plain got shot down. It didn't help that we were uncertain about whether we were doing something "right," particularly our "leader." Tension, bitterness on my part, and lack of preparation were our downfall. I wasn't always taken seriously either, even if I knew what I was talking about, because of my "wusiness" and my poor reputation. That is, my record suggested that I couldn't be trusted to get things done or to get them done on time. To an extent, feeling the projection of those doubts upon me, if only for a moment, caused me to turn it into a self-fulfilling prophecy. Enough about myself, though. The persons in charge of the shot list should have taken into account getting different takes, with different angles and distances, of scene segments. Also, the others weren't super confident with the equipment and they didn't want to trust me (of course, I didn't assert myself), so I took way too long to get set up. And the first shot took way too many takes; so, it's partly that they just didn't approach the idea "right" or well.




















